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Voices

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Voices


Hi I don't have a name. Oh no I don't, the voices took it away long ago. I guess you could say that voices took it when I killed her. Pushed her out the window I did. Giggling and laughing as I watch her body fall from the height. After that the voices came and said that I no longer have a name, but instead a number. My number is six-hundred and sixty-six.

Hehe what's with the uncomfortable look in your eyes? Am I scaring you? Don't be, I won't hurt you.

I promise.

Just like she had promised to love me forever, but instead she betrayed me. Heh you know the look in your eyes remind me of her's, so beautiful, so alluring. I was going to keep you a live but sadly... the voices say otherwise.

Tch I guess promises are really meant to be broken.
I know what your thinking. "Girl what the eff did I just read. You belong in like a place"
But hear me out okay. This was an assignment in my English class today to help us learn mood and tone. She gave us each one mood word and one tone word and told us to make a short story from them.

Tone word: Psychotic
Mood word: uncomfortable

How'd I do? Did I make you as the reader uncomfortable and did it seem like the narrator was psychotic? I just wanna know what you think of this.

As a last note, this was Edger Allen Poe inspired and also Diabolik Lovers inspired some of this as well.
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ManLion-y-SherbetEmu's avatar
I wish small stories like these were more appreciated. This was very well done! I loved the way the narrator spoke, it felt like we were having a one sided conversation. I hope you got a good score on this because it was a job well done! I would love to see more 'uncomfortable' styled stories from you.